Well, I'd say this is one of your better reviews, though I'll admit I've only read a few. It still reads dryly, like you're writing for school or work or something. You seem to be fond of lengthy paragraphs with technical or formal writing scattered within them. And this tends to make it a bit difficult to read, sometimes. However, it is informative, and that's good. You just need to refine it more so that it's more entertaining and interesting.
But this one has a lot of the elements to make a great review. I like how your glitches paragraph - the first half, anyway, with the examples. That's the kind of change-up in writing style we need to see more often. It's entertaining.
Also, you did describe some things pretty well, and they would've resonated better if not for the way you structure your sentences around them. I think something you described about combat may fit that role... but I can't remember. Even though I just read the review. That's probably a bad thing.
I did like your conclusion. That was interesting. Makes me remember something I heard about that probably happened like a decade ago. Did you know there was some cult group or something who got a bit crazy with the tabletop version of this game and started acting the stuff out even more realistically than normal role-playing is meant to be? I can't remember if there was one person in the group doing it or the whole group themselves, but I think they either attacked people to drink their blood, or voluntarily drank each other's blood, or killed people. I don't remember. It was ages since I heard about it.
Anyway, this does seem like I game worth checking out some times. Seems kind of like Morrowind almost, with how you describe charisma.
Hm... Charisma. That'd fit that one example I was looking for earlier.
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will