This was a very detailed review, fleinn, but I would encourage you to trim things down in this and in future reviews. The text was remarkably long, to the point where I finally copied the content into Word for a word count: 2599 words. That's just a few hundred words shy of the typical length of a chapter in a novel, and about twice as much as most readers will endure when they decide to start reading a game review.
You made a lot of good points here, but word economy would have made them more quickly and with more impact. That would have resulted in less retread, as well, since at times it felt like you had just made a point and then decided to start making it all over again.
I think that your ideas here are interesting, but it's important to present interesting ideas in a way that leaves people inclined to explore all of them. In high school, a lot of students complain when they have to write a 500-word essay or whatever, because how in the world can someone possibly come up with so many words? By the time we grow out of that juvenile phase, a lot of writers are struggling just as much to trim away unnecessary words and cut right to the heart of the matter. If you're looking to improve as a writer, that's your next step. See how much good content you can pack into a 1500-word review. See how you can better phrase things. It's a wonderful exercise.
You made a lot of good points here, but word economy would have made them more quickly and with more impact. That would have resulted in less retread, as well, since at times it felt like you had just made a point and then decided to start making it all over again.
I think that your ideas here are interesting, but it's important to present interesting ideas in a way that leaves people inclined to explore all of them. In high school, a lot of students complain when they have to write a 500-word essay or whatever, because how in the world can someone possibly come up with so many words? By the time we grow out of that juvenile phase, a lot of writers are struggling just as much to trim away unnecessary words and cut right to the heart of the matter. If you're looking to improve as a writer, that's your next step. See how much good content you can pack into a 1500-word review. See how you can better phrase things. It's a wonderful exercise.
"Too often we enjoy the comfort of opinion without the discomfort of thought." - John F. Kennedy on reality
"What if everything you see is more than what you see--the person next to you is a warrior and the space that appears empty is a secret door to another world? What if something appears that shouldn't? You either dismiss it, or you accept that there is much more to the world than you think. Perhaps it really is a doorway, and if you choose to go inside, you'll find many unexpected things." - Shigeru Miyamoto on secret doors to another world
"What if everything you see is more than what you see--the person next to you is a warrior and the space that appears empty is a secret door to another world? What if something appears that shouldn't? You either dismiss it, or you accept that there is much more to the world than you think. Perhaps it really is a doorway, and if you choose to go inside, you'll find many unexpected things." - Shigeru Miyamoto on secret doors to another world
