Ouch, a racing game that doesn't let you mod cars. Unless you're the maudlin Mario Kart franchise or the oddly puzzle-based Trackmania series, that doesn't bode well.
Still sounds like a fun game, though, from the way you describe the scripted events. That's a cool idea for a racing game and, no, I don't think it's been done before except in a derivative fashion by ExciteTruck.
Some technicalities. These lines I think need work here:
"It didn’t make the mistake most do of simply mirroring aspects from popular franchises, all the while failing to add anything new that will entice loyal followers to jump ship."
That's a pretty awkward line. The "all the while" is confusing. I can't tell if you're saying that Split Second fails to add anything new or if it doesn't make the mistake of not adding anything new. Depending on which you're trying to say, I could make some suggestions as how to better word it.
"Split/Second does so within the first few seconds, thrusts you into chaos and introduces the one thing that makes it unlike anything I’ve ever played before: Power Plays--a momentary, unexpected twist in the environment that will level any driver in its path."
If you look, you never define what "does so" is referring to. I assume you mean it adds something new in within the first few seconds.
Thrusts doesn't agree, tense-wise, with does so. Should be thrusting. Same with introduces = introducing.
The colon makes this a rather long sentence and could read better if cut down and broken into two sentences.
Still sounds like a fun game, though, from the way you describe the scripted events. That's a cool idea for a racing game and, no, I don't think it's been done before except in a derivative fashion by ExciteTruck.
Some technicalities. These lines I think need work here:
"It didn’t make the mistake most do of simply mirroring aspects from popular franchises, all the while failing to add anything new that will entice loyal followers to jump ship."
That's a pretty awkward line. The "all the while" is confusing. I can't tell if you're saying that Split Second fails to add anything new or if it doesn't make the mistake of not adding anything new. Depending on which you're trying to say, I could make some suggestions as how to better word it.
"Split/Second does so within the first few seconds, thrusts you into chaos and introduces the one thing that makes it unlike anything I’ve ever played before: Power Plays--a momentary, unexpected twist in the environment that will level any driver in its path."
If you look, you never define what "does so" is referring to. I assume you mean it adds something new in within the first few seconds.
Thrusts doesn't agree, tense-wise, with does so. Should be thrusting. Same with introduces = introducing.
The colon makes this a rather long sentence and could read better if cut down and broken into two sentences.
Note to gamers: when someone shoots you in the face, they aren't "gay." They are "psychopathic."
