Though the points here are well made, the review does suffer from being listy: transitions are either poorly made or not even attempted leading to many paragraphs being nothing more than unmarked categories. Intro- plot - gameplay - graphics - sound - conclusion. This is an easy habit to fall into, but you should try to get out of it as early as you can. Talk about the game as a whole and you’ll find all these aspects blend into one giant topic over time. The only way to get to this point is to keep writing; there’s potential here and you know what needs to be talked about, so just start trying to tie them all together.
For us. For them. For you.