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hastypixels's Heiankyo Alien 3671 review

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Gary Hartley Staff Oct 20, 2017
Dude, if you’re saying the game’s title enough that you feel you need to abbreviate it, then you’re saying the game’s title too much. This is coming from someone’s whose current review is Marvel’s Guardians of the Galaxy: Episode Four: Who Needs you? You, too, can get around awkward repetitive word placement. In fact, you do! In the rest of your review, you say the game title twice, once unabbreviated, making the entire thing pointless!

There’s a few bits of overkill, like how keys can be rebinded, which seems pretty universal and, though I appreciate the music paragraph as it goes into and justifies the depth it goes into, it’s awkwardly levered in there. Good review overall; nice way to start your freelance efforts!
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Simon Woodington Freelancer Oct 20, 2017 edited
Thanks EmP, these are things I'm learning as I polish my technique. HA3671 (heh) was a different experience to review and I felt more tension about the whole process. Restating the whole title at the end shows that.

I guess you're saying, once you set a rule, stick to it?

Jason's a good guide, and I'm learning a lot from him. I would like to be able to write comfortably - and competently - so that I can just write and post reviews whenever. I've got a ways to go, but I'm working on it!
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