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Feedback on dementedhut's Parodius review. 7 replies.

alison jones Aug 23, 2011 edited
"and aspire you" should be "inspire"

I suppose the intro was necessary to set the scene but it didn't really grab attention, for what is a totally grabby attention game. And that applied to the conclusion too. I haven't played Parodius but a friend did and I saw the whole crazy thing! Loved the descriptions in the third paragraph.

PS. some sceenshots would be awesome!
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dementedhut Aug 23, 2011
Wouldn't aspire still work in that situation? Like "I aspire not to be a continue whore!"

I understand the want for screenshots, but it's more of a preference for me not to show them in my reviews. I only do it in rare instances. There are screenshots of both games for the arcade versions, so maybe I might put those in.

Thanks for reading, too.
I heard spaceshit noises.
Alan Charlesworth Aug 24, 2011 edited
'Aspire' would still work, but not the way you phrased it. To get technical for a moment, you've got the subject and object of the verb the wrong way round. The way it's phrased at the moment, it's the game that's aspiring to something. It might seem minor, but it's like the difference between 'man bites dog' and 'dog bites man'.

To use 'aspire' here, it would need to be something like 'and make you aspire to complete the game', which is a bit clumsy. Better to use something like 'inspire' or 'compel'.

TL;DR version: threetimes is right. :P
'There would be tears and there would be strange laughter. Fierce births and deaths beneath umbrageous ceilings. And dreams, and violence, and disenchantment.'
Marc Golding Staff Aug 25, 2011
Nice review, by the way.
I don't have to prove I'm refined - that's what makes me refined!
Alan Charlesworth Aug 25, 2011
Yes, that's true, I should have mentioned that :p I just get carried away with writing/grammar issues because I'm a pedant. It's a good review, nice work. I particularly enjoyed you putting Parodius in context as essentially a Gradius substitute for the 90s.
'There would be tears and there would be strange laughter. Fierce births and deaths beneath umbrageous ceilings. And dreams, and violence, and disenchantment.'
dementedhut Aug 25, 2011 edited
Haha, thanks, guys. I'm not one to whine or complain about this stuff, but I was getting worried when the only positive thing I've gotten about the review so far was "I love the third paragraph!" XD

That's not to say I don't appreciate the corrections.
I heard spaceshit noises.
Rob Hamilton Staff Aug 25, 2011
The Parodius games are fun as hell. Good shooters that are entertaining to watch, as well as enjoyable to play.
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