This is a really strong review, and I'm afraid I don't have much feedback to offer beyond that vague praise except extremely nitpicky stuff.
Yoshi’s Crafted World for the Switch is the latest entry in the Yoshi franchise, which began in 1995 with the SNES platform Super Mario World 2: Yoshi’s Island and has since spanned multiple titles across numerous platforms.
This sentence is technically fine, but the "and has since spanned..." bit feels redundant after you've spent the opening three pragraphs effectively making that point.
Controls remain intuitive, though shooting eggs continues to use a somewhat cumbersome targeting system that may frustrate younger gamers (the game does have an “mellow” mode for the very young in which Yoshi can fly and takes very little damage).
I'm not sure "an 'mellow' mode" is right here, since there's not a vowel sound at the start of 'mellow' to necessitate "an" instead of "a."
Finally, is the white space at the end intentional?
To get back to my point at the start of this post, I don't have much feedback to offer that isn't extremely nitpicky. The writing throughout is sophisticated and hard to fault, providing ample evidence you have a strong writing background and experience with games. I enjoyed reading the review, and thanks for posting it!
Yoshi’s Crafted World for the Switch is the latest entry in the Yoshi franchise, which began in 1995 with the SNES platform Super Mario World 2: Yoshi’s Island and has since spanned multiple titles across numerous platforms.
This sentence is technically fine, but the "and has since spanned..." bit feels redundant after you've spent the opening three pragraphs effectively making that point.
Controls remain intuitive, though shooting eggs continues to use a somewhat cumbersome targeting system that may frustrate younger gamers (the game does have an “mellow” mode for the very young in which Yoshi can fly and takes very little damage).
I'm not sure "an 'mellow' mode" is right here, since there's not a vowel sound at the start of 'mellow' to necessitate "an" instead of "a."
Finally, is the white space at the end intentional?
To get back to my point at the start of this post, I don't have much feedback to offer that isn't extremely nitpicky. The writing throughout is sophisticated and hard to fault, providing ample evidence you have a strong writing background and experience with games. I enjoyed reading the review, and thanks for posting it!
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"What if everything you see is more than what you see--the person next to you is a warrior and the space that appears empty is a secret door to another world? What if something appears that shouldn't? You either dismiss it, or you accept that there is much more to the world than you think. Perhaps it really is a doorway, and if you choose to go inside, you'll find many unexpected things." - Shigeru Miyamoto on secret doors to another world
"What if everything you see is more than what you see--the person next to you is a warrior and the space that appears empty is a secret door to another world? What if something appears that shouldn't? You either dismiss it, or you accept that there is much more to the world than you think. Perhaps it really is a doorway, and if you choose to go inside, you'll find many unexpected things." - Shigeru Miyamoto on secret doors to another world

