This review has improved since you've added more stuff to it. The intro, which I picked on in the past, now doesn't seem like such a wasted blurb since you then segue into the intro and from to the game's atmosphere. Still, I don't think you need to define what the word 'atmosphere' means. I doubt the audience is that dumb.
Also, you have two line breaks between your fourth and fifth paragraphs, where you obviously only need one. And to act like a high school English teacher, you shouldn't begin your conclusion with 'in conclusion'.
Hope that helps.
Also, you have two line breaks between your fourth and fifth paragraphs, where you obviously only need one. And to act like a high school English teacher, you shouldn't begin your conclusion with 'in conclusion'.
Hope that helps.
I don't have to boost my review resume because I have a real resume.