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This is an informative review that told me what I need to know about a game I knew very little about. I found it interesting that Nippon Ichi changed the genre for this one, and I Like the sound of a lite RPG with that aesthetic. Your text could be improved if you go over it a few times to look for a few common errors, such as repeated phrases (where I suggest you were struggling to choose between a couple of sentence formations and wound up accidentally using both), some minor spelling and grammatical errors, and so forth. Also, in your tagline, that should be "fleshed out" rather than "flushed out." If you find yourself reviewing more often, you might also want to ditch the sectioned approach and look at writing reviews more as an essay, since readers tend not to like sectioned reviews quite as much, particularly for shorter works (we have some much longer reviews that use sections on the site, but that's more necessary there because of their length). Thanks for contributing this review!

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