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Your review's introduction was really strong and found a compelling way to describe the game's assets before dismantling them. Great stuff! I was most of the way through the text before I found the first sentence that needed some fixing. That would be this one: "After you've placed the bomb, you begin the process anew, trudging to another location where you do nothing but still there and stare off into space." I think "still" needs to be a different word, or is missing a word, but you say "hold still" shortly thereafter so you also would want to watch for repetition. I found two other minor points to address after that point, so I wouldn't be surprised if you started to check out right near the end. But whatever the case, this was an excellent review for a game I had never heard about, one that made me feel almost as if I have played it myself now.

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Thank you. I meant to say "stand there and stare off into space." I think initially I wrote "stand still and..." and went to eliminate "still," but got rid of "stand" instead.

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