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Author: wolfqueen001
Posted: April 08, 2009 (09:51 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Heh. This is pretty decent, though it does read a bit listy and formulaic (story/game play/graphics/sound/flaws...), as opposed to integrating them all into one piece. But even so, the transitions work for the most part, and it doesn't read like you're going everywhere; the review basically follows the format you outlined in your second paragraph, so it's not like anything caught me off guard. You also had some unnecessary lines or just things that could be compressed or phrased better, but those aren't a big deal. (things like "Ah, yes" are generally cringeworthy, no offense). But this is still a good effort and I'm glad you wrote it.
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will |
Author: randxian
Posted: April 08, 2009 (04:58 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
You also had some unnecessary lines
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Author: wolfqueen001
Posted: April 08, 2009 (08:22 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
I'll get back to you on that tomorrow or whenever I look through again... if I even find any others. I'm too tired and my head hurts too much right now. >.<
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will |
Author: randxian
Posted: April 08, 2009 (09:32 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Maybe what I need to do is write a review. Let it set there for a few days. Then go over it again with fresh eyes so I can figure out what's wrong.
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