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I think you need to get together with wolfqueen on this one, EmP. There's lots of little stuff here that she can probably help you fix to make this read better (clearly you wrote it while distracted with other things... like work?). It's looking interesting, so I'll look forward to enjoying reading it after a revision.

"Too often we enjoy the comfort of opinion without the discomfort of thought." - John F. Kennedy on reality

"What if everything you see is more than what you see--the person next to you is a warrior and the space that appears empty is a secret door to another world? What if something appears that shouldn't? You either dismiss it, or you accept that there is much more to the world than you think. Perhaps it really is a doorway, and if you choose to go inside, you'll find many unexpected things." - Shigeru Miyamoto

I always find it amusing that an American has a better grasp of English than an Englishman.

"Either, sir, you're an ass or you're masquerading as one."
- Nero Wolfe

Looks like I submitted the draft rather than the proof. I should have fixed a lot of the silly errors you refered to.

For us. For them. For you.

Argh. It's on the focus window! My eyes, my poor innocent eyes!

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[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will

Your eyes aren't so innocent now, I'd wager.

"Too often we enjoy the comfort of opinion without the discomfort of thought." - John F. Kennedy on reality

"What if everything you see is more than what you see--the person next to you is a warrior and the space that appears empty is a secret door to another world? What if something appears that shouldn't? You either dismiss it, or you accept that there is much more to the world than you think. Perhaps it really is a doorway, and if you choose to go inside, you'll find many unexpected things." - Shigeru Miyamoto