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Author: wolfqueen001
Posted: May 02, 2012 (06:56 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Hey, there. I know I haven't commented on any of your reviews yet, but I'm going to now. I truly believe you have some strong potential that could really be refined just with a little mechanical honing. I have read what others have said about your reviews, so I'll keep those in mind as I continue to read this. But before I do anything, I'll want to know if you'll be okay with me heavily proofing your review. If not, I'll just stick to general tips or nothing at all depending on how opposed you are.
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will |
Author: zippdementia
Posted: May 03, 2012 (12:23 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
What a great offer! I hope Alk is still around to take you up on it.
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Author: Alk31997
Posted: May 03, 2012 (02:30 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Ok. Yeah i would encourage your help. I've not been uploading lately due to my new book, all of my attention has went to that. I will start to upload more.
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Author: wolfqueen001
Posted: May 03, 2012 (03:04 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
I'm glad you're interested in the offer. I'm going to try to do for you what others have done for me in the past, which I felt really helped me understand how to write reviews a lot better. I'll start by breaking down each paragraph, then revising it so that the language and sentence structure comes off a lot stronger. However, I'll try to avoid editing the specific text itself, since it is your own creative mind that produced it. After editing each paragraph, I might make a few comments or suggestions on the content itself and explain why some things work well while others don't. Hopefully this will help you understand the finer aspects of reviewing than someone just telling you conceptually what to do. Of course, anything I have to say is my own opinion, which others are welcome to agree or disagree, but I still hope nevertheless that my feedback serves as a guide for future reviews.
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will |
Author: Alk31997
Posted: May 04, 2012 (06:04 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Thank you. I will absorb what you have said. Thanks for your help.
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