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Hm... Well, I have mixed felings about this review. While you do a good job describing everything, as you always do, much of the review's structure felt choppy and awkward. I think this has a lot to do with qualifying words like "often" and "seemingly". Sometimes these words are necessary to give weight to different aspects of the game, but other times they aren't necessary at all and just crowd things up. It's something I myself have been trying to work on.

Still, when the review does pick up, it picks up very well and I get a clear, entertaining image of exactly what you want to say, and that makes it an interesting read.

[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will