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Thank you for submitting this review. It's good to hear a logical argument in favor of giving the game a higher score. You have a good writing style that instantly intrigues. Your points are well-considered, as well.

If you're looking to improve your review, one thing to keep in mind is that your massive paragraphs will prevent people from reading. Unless you want that, chop them up a bit. Don't devote a single paragraph to each section. For instance, your second paragraph all concerns plot but it could--and should--be divided into three paragraphs. Your second paragraph from that larger paragraph could start with this sentence:

Unlike the typical good, bad, and neutral dialogue choices present in conventional RPG's, the world of Geralt is a distinctly bleak shade of grey.

If you break your review into smaller paragraphs, it will be a lot more readable. You already have interesting word choice to keep people going, so you're halfway there! It wouldn't hurt to go back through later and polish things up in other ways, either, once you can look at your own review with fresh eyes. There are numerous smaller spelling and grammatical errors throughout.

With the proper polish, your review can be truly excellent. Thanks again for contributing it!

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