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Author: wolfqueen001
Posted: May 17, 2011 (10:09 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Well, here it is finally. The results for the Re-review tourney. I apologize profusely for delaying so long, but life gets in the way sometimes. Anyway, I commend all four of you for taking the time to rework your reviews. In all cases, all the rewrites were a considerable improvement over the original, and regardless of how well you score here, you should all be very proud of that fact.
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will |
Author: CoarseDragon
Posted: May 17, 2011 (10:51 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
This review is completely new. I did not reference or read the old review at all. I tried to do something completely new. Sorry that fell short in your eyes. I was satisfied with my effort considering I have no background in review writing. As I mentioned before I write technical manuals at work and they require "feelings" to be left out. I tried to do justice to the game, the originator give the reader some insight into what I felt the game was about. I do value your opinions and thank you for them.
Age is a condition not a state of mind. |
Author: wolfqueen001
Posted: May 17, 2011 (11:24 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
You're competing against yourself AND other reviewers. =P
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will |
Author: CoarseDragon
Posted: May 17, 2011 (01:17 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Thank you Wolfqueen, I'll make some of those changes. No doubt doing RotW and other judgings has helped me understand writing better but I know I have a long way to go.
Age is a condition not a state of mind. |
Author: wolfqueen001
Posted: May 17, 2011 (01:54 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
I'd be inclined to remove the "in part" from that altogether, but if you really need it in there, then you could probably get away with removing the commas there as they're not as necessary in my opinion.
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will |
Author: CoarseDragon
Posted: May 17, 2011 (02:02 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
I would like to keep that there because that is only part of the requirement and probably should be pointed out. Thanks again.
Age is a condition not a state of mind. |
Author: dementedhut
Posted: May 17, 2011 (04:05 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Sweet, I didn't think I was going to win this! Even though it was just the four of us, it was still pretty competitive, and I was sure OD was going to nab the top spot. I appreciate all comments on both reviews, and it was very interesting reading what each thought of the two.
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Author: overdrive (Mod)
Posted: May 18, 2011 (11:37 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Thanks for the feedback and congrats to Pick.
I'm not afraid to die because I am invincible |
Author: JoeTheDestroyer (Mod)
Posted: May 19, 2011 (05:14 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Thank you, thank you! I probably didn't pick the best game for this Review-Off, but I am pleased with the results, at least as far as the new review being better than before. Again, many thanks! Congrats, Pickhut!
The only thing my milkshake brings to the yard is a subpoena. |
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