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Awesome review. I was truly mesmerized by your descriptions and the pacing was excellent.

One thing however.

And resistance towards the greater plan could mean snapping only one thread, but tragically unraveling the entire balance that was set.

I was wondering if "not" might belong.

"snapping not only one thread, but tragically unraveling the entire balance that was set."

Age is a condition not a state of mind.

Thanks for the comments Coarse. I appreciate it and glad you liked the review.

Thanks for pointing that section out. I had not noticed it prior but it didn't quite make sense the way I had written it. Hopefully that makes it easier to understand.

I believe in Fate.