Forums > Submission Feedback > dragoon_of_infinity's Spellforce Universe review

Oof. Write a new introduction. It goes from choppy non-sentences at the beginning to a meandering run-on at the end, includes a hack line ("so much content it should be delivered on a forklift"), tells the reader something is obvious when it probably isn't (I didn't find anything obvious two lines in before I even know the concept of the game) and never have I heard the word "realm" used to describe an amount of time.

You're better than this.

EDIT: Upon reading further, this entire review is incredibly sloppy and rambling. It wasn't proofread at all. And if I just came here and read this, I would walk away with a really poor reflection of the site. "These guys don't care."

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I'm the first one to admit that this review isn't my best work. I spent so long just sitting around and staring at it, not knowing what to do with it that I don't even know how to describe it.

Compilations are difficult, it turns out. I had absolutely no idea how to write a review about five games at once, so this ended up coming out like my first review all over again: An awkward draft written by someone learning what they're doing again.

I'm in the middle of doing some rewriting. I really don't have an excuse for the lack of proofing, other than the fact that I became frustrated as I couldn't make the review itself work, and by the time I was 'done' I just wanted to be rid of it.

Anyway, I'll submit some changes soon, and maybe we can make this better.

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Tackling five games at once isn't easy. In this respect, I think you did a good job even, especially at keeping it succinct. It's just the lack of proofreading that reflected poorly. Not everything is going to be flawless, but there were a few too many careless mistakes here.

Maybe check out Masters' SNK Arcade Classics he just submitted. That was a tight compilation review.

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Thanks for the feedback and the suggestions. Sometimes the only to get better is to have it smacked into you, and I think I can improve on this. Especially with some studying.

Honestly, I'm a little glad that someone said something. A bunch of pats on the back would have felt out of place in this case.

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Thanks for the positive feedback Leroux. Ha, a nice surprise to find in someone else's feedback thread. ^_^

I don't have to prove I'm refined - that's what makes me refined!