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Author: aschultz
Posted: June 15, 2010 (04:21 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Lots of comma splices here. Last sentence of P1, second of P2. And P2-2nd sentence swerves too quickly to P2-3rd sentence. Is fighting for the plot to make sense in your mind too much effort?
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