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XD Man, I wish Masters hadn't deleted this topic. I was going to post something amusing, but now I'll only post something slightly amusing.

What I was going to say was something along the lines of "har har. EmP's perfectly capable of writing a review without many errors without me to preen it for him *gasp*". But once I finally got a chance to look at it...

So I guess the point is moot. xP (Of course, if I had looked at it beforehand, you wouldn't have found the who/how error to begin with - if it existed in the first place - because I'm just that good. =P)

To be fair, though, there really isn't a whole lot wrong with this at all. Also, kudos for writing a football soccer review I actually understood for the most part. I even found myself becoming surprisingly interested in the game. And I loathe sports titles.

Frankly, though, I'm just glad you wrote a review and that it turned out well. Even if that sentiment should probably apply more to me... hahahaha. Man, I'm terrible...y busy.

What espiga does in his free time
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will

You people simply take too long to post replies.

The first long sentence you highlight doesn't strike me as needing to be two sentences really. Different writers have different flows...

The second one probably needs a dash before the last bit; the last comma is admittedly a bit weak.

Why not stop ripping Emp's work for long enough to write something of your own? =D

I don't have to prove I'm refined - that's what makes me refined!

I reworked the second, but shall ignore you on the first! I use long sentences at times, and THE MAN will not keep me down.

Thanks for both of your feedback. Even if only one of you felt the need to share it with the world.

The next review I write will be for FIFA '11.

For us. For them. For you.

XD Man, I wish Mas ers...

Well done, Mrs. Proofreader! ^_^

And I did share my thoughts with the world. Not my fault the recipient IGNORED it. =D

I don't have to prove I'm refined - that's what makes me refined!

Bahahaha. How'd I do that?

Anyway, anything I point out is entirely for reference and input. It's entirely EmP's decision whether he listens to me or not. Usually I don't argue with him if it's a stylistic thing; though, admittedly, I will try to push my case on occasion if it's something I find reaaally awkward. heheh.

What espiga does in his free time
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will

Somethng, eh?

I need a new proofer.

For us. For them. For you.

XD It's your fualt. All your poor spelling habits are rubbing off on me. =O

EDIT: See? "fualt" - there's proof right there! xP

What espiga does in his free time
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will

I just speed-wrote a 1234 word review with nary an error in it. Proof that I remain blameless.

Let's get back to fawning over my work now, please.

For us. For them. For you.

EmP gets to make decisions? This is news to me!

//Zig

Unlimited Zig Works!

Haha. Nah. It's a simple matter of exchange. As my spelling habits have decreased, yours have improved. :P

But haha, ok:
Wow! You wrote such a good review without any errors in just 15 minutes?! How'd you do that? You're such an amazing writer. You should win an award or something! <3333333333

What espiga does in his free time
[Eating EmP's brain] probably isn't a good idea. I mean... He's British, which means his brain's wired for PAL and your eyes are NTSC. - Will

I just speed-wrote a 1234 word review with nary an error in it. Proof that I remain blameless.

I speed-counted 1111, TOPS. Quit puffing yourself out.

My principal said, 'Emo, Emo, Emo.'
I said 'I'm the one in the middle, you lousy drunk!'
-- Emo Phillips