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Author: Felix_Arabia
Posted: May 21, 2008 (06:13 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Walls of text. I thought there was some form of editing that went on behind the scenes to make sure freelancers didn't sub such difficult to read reviews to the site?
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Author: drella
Posted: May 21, 2008 (07:08 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Ugh. Didn't enjoy getting this one in my RSS.
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Author: honestgamer
Posted: May 21, 2008 (10:55 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
I have modified the review to break down the walls of text. This one in my opinion should have spent a lot longer in the revision process. Melaisis is a newer freelancer for the site and this isn't the illustrious start we might have hoped for, but there are extenuating circumstances that worked against him in this case.
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Author: drella
Posted: May 22, 2008 (11:01 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
I agree with the slightly overwritten point, which does create some confusion. For example, at one point he says it's "often considered a compilation," which is a fairly strange phrasing.
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Author: EmP (Mod)
Posted: May 23, 2008 (03:41 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
This is my fault. Mel sent me a draft of the review, but as I only have very limited 'net access, I could do no more than scan it.
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Author: Melaisis
Posted: May 23, 2008 (08:49 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Yeah, cheers for the feedback guys. I hail from a long line of long-winded writers; whilst that sort of style goes down well at fiction clubs and when it comes to in-depth features, it probably isn't the best when it comes to the lesser-known games especially. Heck, I was even impressed at myself when it came to how much I'd actually written. Trackmania is a hard subject, and someone has already pointed out about the whole 'considered a complication' point. Again, it is because it includes elements and accessibility to other games in the franchise, as well as bringing new things to the table. Its like being able to play Pokemon Blue with someone who has Pokemon Silver.
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Author: honestgamer
Posted: May 23, 2008 (11:48 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Finally, EmP's computer problems have proved an annoyance, as I did send it off to be proof-read (or edited ruthlessly), yet due to technicalities, this wasn't as successful as it should have been.
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