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This review has improved since you've added more stuff to it. The intro, which I picked on in the past, now doesn't seem like such a wasted blurb since you then segue into the intro and from to the game's atmosphere. Still, I don't think you need to define what the word 'atmosphere' means. I doubt the audience is that dumb.

Also, you have two line breaks between your fourth and fifth paragraphs, where you obviously only need one. And to act like a high school English teacher, you shouldn't begin your conclusion with 'in conclusion'.

Hope that helps.

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