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Author: zippdementia
Posted: July 22, 2009 (04:07 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
This review, in a word, is long. If I were to add another word to that, it would be "too" long. It took me several attempts to actually make my way through this, and that doesn't do you any favours.
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Author: threetimes
Posted: July 23, 2009 (04:42 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Yeah, I agree. It is too long. I had a shorter version and then kept thinking of more things I wanted to say, and well...said it! Thanks for reading it anyway.
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Author: psychopenguin
Posted: July 26, 2009 (11:14 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
No I would not say it's 'too long'. It's an old obscure RPG with limited information. The more, the merrier.
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Author: aschultz
Posted: July 26, 2009 (11:39 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
If we can remove length and keep the information the same, that's a good thing. In fact, the reader may be more willing to digest the information he gets. Sentences like the following can be pared down:
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Author: psychopenguin
Posted: July 26, 2009 (11:50 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Maybe so, but in the case of an old obscure RPG, I could see the benefit of a longer review. It's always easier to narrow down as opposed to adding on.
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Author: zippdementia
Posted: July 27, 2009 (12:55 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
And in this case, I thought it could've used more narrowing down.
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Author: psychopenguin
Posted: July 27, 2009 (05:36 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Are you clueless or just a joke account?
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Author: threetimes
Posted: July 27, 2009 (05:55 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Er, what? :O
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Author: JANUS2
Posted: July 27, 2009 (08:22 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Psycho Penguin was talking to Zipp.
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Author: aschultz
Posted: July 27, 2009 (09:05 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Threetimes--first things first, I like the improvements. I have a general rule I've established for myself recently: If I write a review of 10K or more, I look to cut it by 15%. It feels good to write, and it should, if you know the game.
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Author: JANUS2
Posted: July 27, 2009 (09:22 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Actually, I thought the introduction was quite good. I liked the contrast between the idea of it being unknown and fairly ordinary in a superficial sense but actually being a rewarding experience for those who delve deeper. Thinking about it, this angle is what interested me in the review. If it had opened with a tangent about the bible I would have probably stopped reading.
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Author: aschultz
Posted: July 27, 2009 (09:51 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Hmm...I can see what you mean. I'm not advocating a tangent as in the 2nd paragraph, but my immediate reaction is, "okay, this game has the word 'Bible' in the name so what's up with that?"
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Author: threetimes
Posted: July 27, 2009 (10:31 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
I cut the second paragraph out after the comments about length and that explained a little of the series and that it's a Megami Tensei gaiden game. The start of what is now the second paragraph does sound awkward, though I like the introduction the way it is. Thanks for the heads up on that typo, I'll deal with that and the other thing when I've finished arguing about that Mana Khemia review. ;)
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Author: JANUS2
Posted: July 27, 2009 (10:49 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Another thing you need to do is change your forum avatar to ANYTHING that isn't the default picture.
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Author: zippdementia
Posted: July 27, 2009 (11:33 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Yeah the default picture is one of the most hideous things I've seen in my life.
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Author: aschultz
Posted: July 27, 2009 (01:05 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
I'd say you can maybe take part of a screenshot from this game, then post it to the avatar list(click on the avatar) and then change to that.
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