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Author: zippdementia
Posted: July 22, 2009 (03:50 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
This review didn't grab me the way yours usually do, Aschultz. I found it read a lot like an instruction manual, with too much emphasis placed on the different buttons you push and not enough on the experience.
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Author: aschultz
Posted: July 22, 2009 (04:59 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Thanks again for the big pointers on what I can edit, though I have the matter of a review tonight to finish for the team tourney.
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Author: zippdementia
Posted: July 22, 2009 (06:31 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
In that case, I would just change your focus without really changing the content. There's just too many paragraphs which seem meant to only talk about the controls. If you were to mention them in a more interesting way, such as...
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