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Author: zippdementia
Posted: May 29, 2009 (11:31 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
You really are one of my favourite writers on this site, Aschultz. Your command of writing ensures your reviews are always descriptive and interesting and well paced up to great conclusions. The two things I think you need to work on are (a) flow and (b) flair.
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Author: aschultz
Posted: May 29, 2009 (11:59 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Zippdementia--thanks very much for the criticism! I appreciate it, positive and negative. I am still finding a lot to correct in my Deathlord fanfic, btw.
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Author: bloomer
Posted: May 29, 2009 (08:22 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
This review is a good length for the understated or droll approach to humour. For instance I got a huge laugh at the paragraph opening 'The trick is doing this for 3700 rounds.' I found the whole thing very funny, the rest of the time in a way where I'm smiling and suppressing making actual noise. I think there are perhaps a couple of sentences in there that are mildly confusing.
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