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Author: zippdementia Posted: May 26, 2009 (06:53 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums...

I was genuinely interested in this review, and then you just cut off us at the end. Where's the other half? It feels like there's a large chunk missing. It's a very well-paced review, and I like that. But don't crash and burn at the finish line! Also, you should do a read through of your work before posting, as there are numerous grammatical errors sprinkled liberally throughout the piece.

Author: randxian Posted: May 26, 2009 (08:02 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums...

Agreed. The review needs a better closing. I do like the commentary about the loop-de-loops. I felt that part was very insightful.

Author: bigcj34 Posted: May 27, 2009 (01:57 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums...

Yeh, it appears that one can never read through a review too many times. I can see what you mean about the truncated ending now, it didn't occur to me before and I'll look into expanding it. Probably turning the last paragraph into two, and expand on points mentioned. Any specific grammatical mistakes?

Author: zippdementia Posted: May 27, 2009 (02:10 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums...

The first one that catches my eye is "the Japan and North America."

Author: bigcj34 Posted: May 27, 2009 (12:39 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums...

Okay, expanded the review a bit and hopefully ironed out some grammatical errors. Cheers for the critique!

Author: zippdementia Posted: May 27, 2009 (01:22 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums...

"Sonic 2’s level structure is essentially the same as the originals." original's... it's possesive The ending is much better. Now the review is pretty awesome.