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Author: zippdementia
Posted: March 07, 2009 (02:07 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
I have to say, this isn't a very solid review. To be more precise (and helpful) I would say that your ideas and content are good, but your presentation is lacking. A good writer on this site once told me never to use lists in my reviews. I was younger in those days, and more arrogant (a whole three months ago). I scoffed at the advice in public... but behind the scenes I took a look at what he was talking about and realized he was right, by George!
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Author: Lewis
Posted: March 07, 2009 (02:37 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
"A good writer on this site once told me never to use lists in my reviews."
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Author: bloomer
Posted: March 07, 2009 (03:24 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
I say use lists all you want... if they're at the end of the review, and it seems here they are. If that's what is being talked about? I assume Zipp meant those little category summaries?
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Author: Lewis
Posted: March 07, 2009 (03:33 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Subcategories (which is what I assume Zipp is referring to) can work, but only when they're thickly disguised and serve a purpose. Splitting it into subcategories ruins the flow, and moreover, suggests you're not really engaging with what makes the game tick. Instead, you're just going through the technical motions of the game development process.
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Author: bloomer
Posted: March 07, 2009 (04:06 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Maybe we're all talking about different things. Zipp said 'lists' - I thought he meant the little subcategories at the end of the review, and that was already a stretch from what I was thinking of, which was more like a list of pros and cons. And you're talking about the broader headings throughout the review. I almost didn't notice those here because the review is long. But I think all in all we all kinda get what each other is talking about by now.
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Author: zippdementia
Posted: March 07, 2009 (01:02 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Lewis actually wasn't the one I was referring to, because I didn't reply snarkily to him (if you'll remember). But Lewis gave me similar advice, yes.
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Author: fleinn
Posted: March 08, 2009 (05:16 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
Really appreciate the feedback. I wrote about it a bit on the blog.. I had two versions. This is the first one, that was supposed be two pages. And then I added some headlines and spacing - which.. *cough*. Looked better in the text- editor. But I agree that's not the biggest problem with the review.
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Author: zippdementia
Posted: March 08, 2009 (11:04 PM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
It reads like a solid attempt at a review with some common mistakes made by a lot of people who are just starting out. I know... I was there not so long ago.
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Author: fleinn
Posted: March 09, 2009 (09:06 AM) Actions: Register for a free user account to post on the forums... |
And it actually looked much better in my head, before I wrote it down, you know? :p Irritating thing.
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