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Title: Almost Done / Bring It
Posted: December 06, 2008 (09:55 PM)
Only one or two more to go. For every one of my old reviews I think are awesome, there are three that make me question whether I was really that stupid and whether I actually had any idea how to score a game out of ten...

...speaking of which, c'mon, someone (if there is, in fact, anyone reading at all), rip into one (of the ones on HG). Pick any excuse and run with it. Ever since the main population of RCB on GameFAQs up and left, you can't get any responses more detailed than "it's good" or "it sucks", and I've forgotten what it's like to have someone tear your work to shreds.

honestgamerUser: honestgamer
Posted: December 07, 2008 (12:16 AM)
I'm not able to give a full critique right now, as I'm in the middle of a huge project, but I did want to reassure you that people do read your blog entries. I'm one of them.

As for a partial critique, I should say that your Sonic 2006 review was too long. That's not much better than sying "It sucks" or "It was good," I realize, but I'm really not saying either of thos things. The writing that I read was good, but around 1200 words or so I just stopped reading because I've already read a lot about the game and you weren't saying anything different... only going on at much greater length.

It's good to write a comprehensive review for a game, and I wouldn't say to stop covering all of those important bases, but maybe you need to think about how to do so more effectively. If you have a lot to say, that's a really good time to start going over your review and looking at things like word economy and even how to arrange points so that it takes fewer words to say the same basic things.

I hope that you'll stick around and continue contributing. I'm sure that you'll continue to get feedback, and probably of a more useful variety than what I've just offered. In particular, people who offer critiques of their own for other peoples' writing tend to find themselves on the receiving end of the occasional unsolicited critique. It's something I and others like to see and something that we try to encourage.

Your writing doesn't have any obvious grammatical errors that you make with any frequency that I could see, so the next obvious point is to start working on word economy and organization. If you're not entirely sure what I mean, then here in a few weeks I should be able to provide a more detailed analysis of any new review you submit, with examples and such. For now, though, I need to get back to my project.

Anyone else reading this entry, please feel free to pick up some of the slack!

FeduleUser: Fedule
Posted: December 07, 2008 (12:41 AM)
Can't really argue that that one goes on a bit - and I do have a habit of using more words than is really necessary. Heck, reading through that particular review, entire paragraphs jump out as being deletable. I guess that when writing that, I just wanted to rant a lot because, let's face it, if you paid money for that game you'd be pretty annoyed. But yeah, point conceded, and in my defense, I've been making efforts in later reviews to be more brief. Might go over Sonic 2006 with a Ctrl X and see what happens...

[edit: Cut 3kb of text. I guess I wasn't kidding...]

Posted: December 07, 2008 (03:34 AM)
you could always enter my xmas contest (topic on the contributor board) for some feedback!

Felix_ArabiaUser: Felix_Arabia
Posted: December 07, 2008 (11:30 AM)
I left you some feedback for your Sonic review. Go check out the newest RotW topic on the Contributor Forum.

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